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Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts

Tuesday, August 10, 2021

Dialog Tags - Still Valid in 2021!

copyright Aaron Lazar 2009
When I first started writing over a decade ago, I exulted in every new dialog tag I could think up. I preened over “he croaked” and purred over “she grumbled.” Finding new and inventive ways to say “he said” became my quest.
My early works were peppered with gloats, murmurs, and barks. I even started a most coveted (only by me) list.
How many words can you think of to say “he said” or “she said?” Here are some, in no particular order: Mumbled Murmured Expostulated Grunted Groaned Whispered Purred Spat Huffed Croaked Barked Choked Queried Cackled Harrumphed Stuttered Muttered Moaned Hissed Grumbled Whined Sang Twittered Tittered Griped Yelped Cried Stammered Shrieked Crooned Wheedled Retorted Pressured Cajoled How many more can you think of? There are probably hundreds.
...
Okay, now that you’ve wracked your brain for tantalizing tags, let me tell you one very important lesson.
DON’T * EVER * USE * THEM.
What? Such brilliance? Such innovative thought?
Yeah. Sorry. Forget it. Never use anything but “said,” “asked,” or an occasional “whisper” or “mumble.”
Once in a great while, if you feel you really need it, slip in a “spat” or “croaked.” But I’m here to tell you that dialog tags, for the most part, should be invisible. “Said,” is invisible. “Asked,” is invisible. “Barked” stops the flow of the dialog. Anything that makes your story stutter needs to be eliminated, including these juicy but totally distracting tags.
Got that part?
Now that I’ve encouraged you to use “said,” I’m going to retract it.
Forgive me, but that’s just the way it is. If you can avoid a tag altogether–through the clever use of action “beats”– then more power to you.
Here’s an example of changing a passage from lush useless tags, to he said/she said tags, to using beats instead of tags:
Case A:
I maneuvered the van around the next pothole, and was about to congratulate myself for my superior driving skills when a series of washboard ruts nearly popped the fillings out of my teeth. “Want me to take over?” Tony wheedled. “Why? Am I making you nervous?” I retorted, gripping the steering wheel until my knuckles turned white. “Of course not, sweetums. You’re a great driver. Just thought you might want a break,” he crooned. We rounded the bend and the road disappeared. The crater before us could hold three elephants. Big elephants.
“Whoa! Watch it, honey. Don’t wanna blow a tire,” Tony groaned.
Case B
I maneuvered the van around the next pothole, and was about to congratulate myself for my superior driving skills when a series of washboard ruts nearly popped the fillings out of my teeth. “Want me to take over?” Tony said, leaning on the dashboard. “Why? Am I making you nervous?” I said with a frown. All smiles, he said, “Of course not, sweetums. You’re a great driver. Just thought you might want a break.” We rounded the bend and the road disappeared. The crater before us could hold three elephants. Big elephants. “Whoa! Watch it, honey. Don’t wanna blow a tire,” Tony said in a panic.
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Case C
I maneuvered the van around the next pothole, and was about to congratulate myself for my superior driving skills when a series of washboard ruts nearly popped the fillings out of my teeth. Tony braced himself on the dash. “Want me to take over?” My knuckles turned white. “Why? Am I making you nervous?” “Of course not, sweetums.” He forced an innocent smile. “You’re a great driver. Just thought you might want a break.” We rounded the bend and the road disappeared. The crater before us could hold three elephants. Big elephants. Tony’s frozen smile barely hid his panic. “Whoa! Watch it, honey. Don’t wanna blow a tire.”
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These examples aren’t beautifully written or perfectly rendered. But they should give you the gist of what I’m trying to illustrate today.
Add your own examples below, if you’d like. Let’s see some Case A, B, and C’s in the comments section!

Thursday, February 9, 2017

Writing Skinny and Puppy Love


How to Slenderize Your Manuscript by Kim Smith



This is a post from 2011 - I am recycling for you today. Since next week is Valentines Day, I want to wish you much love. Go get my latest love story. It has a dog in it. You will be in LOVE!


It's called PUPPY LOVE _ click the link below to magically be transported http://a.co/aw0E6tR

On with the post...

One of the things that gives me a happy frame of mind when writing is to have a clean, unfettered manuscript. When I wake up in the morning and open a WIP that has been edited, that has a streamline feel, and there isn’t garbage cluttering it up, I feel great.

When, on the other hand, I open my book and find extra plot-lines/unnecessary characters or just bad writing all over the place, it stresses me out.

These are a few tips for getting the junk out:

Do it in small chunks. Set aside 5 pages to work on at a time, and when that 5 is satisfactory, stop. Then tackle another 5 the next day. Conquering the entire work can be overwhelming, and you might decide it is hopeless and find yourself uncomfortably blocked.

Set aside a couple hours to do it. This may seem elementary… and it is. It’s simply a different strategy, and I say do whatever works for you. Sometimes, for me, it’s good to set aside part of a manuscript, or an entire scene to do in a set amount of time. The weekends are perfect! Just whatever works best for me in the time I have.

Sort through your manuscript and cut scenes and rearrange them. Have a folder to put the cut scenes in handy. When you pull everything out of a scene, send it to the new folder (I call this OUTTAKES but I am an old videographer, too). Put in new material, and make a decision: trash the old, add old to new, or keep new and leave old for a while until you are certain it won't hurt anything else in the book. Don’t put it back in the pile for a good while. You may find you never need it again, but that scene could fit in another work, or give you a muse-tweak that sends the book in a new direction.

Study your habits and see if you are making these unnecessary plots or characters out of a bad habit. Sometimes there’s a reason you have pages of crap all over the place, and an OUTTAKES folder that is stuffed full. Craft books with emphasis on writing tight might help.

Celebrate when you’re done! Give yourself a big old pat on the back. This sort of cleaning out the old junk and rearranging or reordering or plain old remaking your book is very therapeutic.

Thursday, January 26, 2017

What inspires you to write?

Yo', Murderers...Happy Thursday!



I hope this post finds you writing and plotting a novel like never before. I am reading a good book on creativity. It is inspiring me. What inspires you to write? Do you have a special place to write? I used to. Now I am a write wherever I am kind of person. I can write long-hand, or on computer, doesn't matter.

What gets you in the writing chair? Do you set deadlines for yourself?

Post up your comments, and let us know!

Thursday, January 19, 2017

Starting out the new year by writing a novel

Good day, Murderers...



So we made the 101 Best Sites list again (Writers Digest Writers Yearbook 2017), and I wanted to thank everyone for being a part of our little family here. We have had ups and downs *personally I am having a lot of downs right now* but this site has survived it all.

This week I want to address those of you (us)who are starting out this new year writing a book-maybe for the first time. Maybe it is not your first book, but you are finally committed to finishing it.

Either way, this post might be of some benefit.


What does one do when they have an idea that won't leave them alone? Characters that talk to them all day and night? A setting that demands to be developed in a literary way?

Well, WRITE IT DOWN!


That's the real first step to writing anything. Just start. One page a day. 250 words on a computer screen will get you far when it becomes a daily habit. Try it. Try writing 250 words on a blank Word Doc and see if you don't discover that once you get started you could keep going on and on.

My problem is not getting started sometimes, sometimes it is STOPPING!

And do this without thought for correct spelling, syntax, or anything else...just write!

I would love to hear what your process is, or your questions are...post them up below!

Thursday, January 12, 2017

Murderers, as writers

Good day, Murderers!

I hope this finds you doing something that fulfills you.

What is everyone reading?



Yes, reading is a part of being a writer. I am usually reading two books at a time, one electronically and one in paper. At the moment, I am reading The Book of Joy in paper. It is a very good read. It is written by a gentleman who spent time with The Dalai Lama and Archbishop Desmond Tutu as they celebrated one of the holy men's birthday. It is filled with wonderful advice on how to live a joy-filled life. We all could use that, right?

The other one I am working on my Kindle app is Dare to Love by Carly Phillips. It is romance, not something for everyone, but still a worthy read.

I am supposed to be writing a page a day on the next Shannon Wallace book but have some personal family things going on at the moment that is blocking any sort of creative endeavor beyond blogging. I sure hope 2017 doesn't keep going like it has begun. So far, it has pretty much sucked.

But you don't want to hear that do you??

Murderers, as writers, you should be reading something. And as writers, you should be writing something. Even blog posts. EVERY DAY. Don't forget if you do this for 21 days it will become a habit.

Do not do as I do. Do as I say do.

Happy Thursday, y'all.

Thursday, May 19, 2016

Writers blog and blogs of writers

Writers are still blogging. There is no question about it. Many other career-minded individuals have fled the blogosphere, but not writers.

So if the matter is not, are writers blogging, but rather, what are writers blogging, then let's look at that.

In my opinion, writers always have a lot to say about blogging. Here is a short list:


1. Writers write about writing
2. Writers write about their stories, books, poems, etc.
3. Writers write about what jazzes them (might be political, religious, etc.)
4. Writers write about books they are reading
5. Writers write about the places they travel to

I think that reading a writer's blog is the most fun of my entire day. (I am the WRITER GROUPIE, remember?) The reason? I always learn something from a writer's blog.

The thing is, so many writers use their blog to allow readers into their world. They blog like it is a big electronic diary. That's great, but sometimes, we do not want to know what you had for dinner and how many times your dog tried to bite the UPS guy.

Sometimes your readers WANT GOOD STUFF!!


Yes, we are selfish. We want food for our own life. Sorry, writers.

So here is a short list of some good food for writers to use on their blog to feed their readers.

1. When writing about craft, give us good titles. Sometimes we think we are getting one sort of post but end up getting another and if we are not writers-well, we usually hit the exit rather quickly.

2. Posts about your books need to be given warnings beforehand. Let us know in advance that you are going to be posting up the buy links, excerpts, etc. before you actually post them. Some of us want to BUY that book and so we don't want to miss any SALES!

3. Finally, if you are a writer, but you only have reviews of books, interviews with writers, and info about book blog tours for other writers, we may never find out the thing you want us to know--info about YOUR WORK. So mix it up. Give us a whole week once in a while of stuff about YOU instead of somebody else. (I do not follow book bloggers but I do visit them occasionally, so that should tell you something)

In conclusion, i.e. getting off my soapbox, I hope you will check out some exciting things coming to my blog in the near future...including some sort book tour stuff I am involved in. Fun June ahead!

Tuesday, March 22, 2016

From Mystery to Romance and Back



How Aaron Paul Lazar Shifts Between Genres

By

Dora Machado

Hello Aaron. Welcome! Why and how did you make the transition from mystery to romance?

Hi, Dora! Thanks for asking. I had actually written over a dozen mysteries when I decided to depart from my favorite genre and write a love story. The reason? Blame it on wife! She loves Nicholas Sparks, and actually said to me, “You need to write a story like he does. A good love story.”

We’d been staying on Cape Cod each summer for a week for the past few years, and I’d fallen in love with Paines Creek Beach in Brewster, Mass. I felt like I needed to set a story there, and what better than a romance? I will admit that I’d rarely read any romance, but naturally, I knew what love was, and had been exposed to those types of stories my whole love by watching movies with my wife in that genre. I’m actually glad I didn’t read the current most popular authors in romance, because I wanted my own stamp on this book. Thus, The Seacrest was born. It actually has won some awards, so I guess my approach worked! 

·         2015 Semi-finalist in Kindle Book Review Awards
·         2014 Best Beach Book Festival WINNER, Romance category
·         2013 ForeWord Book Awards, Romance, FINALIST

How are The Seacrest, The Seacroft, and The Seadog related?

When I wrote The Seacrest, I didn’t intend it to become a series, but I had so much pressure from my readers to give them more of those characters and that setting, I had to give in. The Seacroft is book two in the series, and The Seadog is book 3, but I wrote them all to easily standalone so one can read them in any order. There are common characters in each book – for example, Finn and Libby from The Seacrest are in both books 2 and 3, but they aren’t the featured characters anymore. 

In The Seacroft, I move forward five years in the future from The Seacrest and bring Finn’s young nephew (15 in the first book) to manhood. Cody is now twenty-one and becomes embroiled in a difficult situation when his lascivious boss wants to own him in everyway imaginable (!), yet he finds himself falling for the demure young woman who also works on the estate. The Seacroft is a twin mansion to The Seacrest, by the way, built two hundred years ago by twin brothers. Both are located off Paines Creek Beach. 

In The Seadog, book 3, two new characters emerge, and so far they have become my favorite of all. Scout Vanderhorn is a spunky redhead whose life has been hell. Abandoned by her father, abused by her stepfather, and poor as a church mouse, she sets out to meet her biological father at The Seacrest mansion. Jack Remington doesn’t remember his name or last month. He’s living in a cave on the beach, barely surviving. And all he wants to do is paddle his kayak out onto the ocean to search for something he can’t remember.

How are they different?

They are different stories about love and loss and survival, of course. But mostly they feature new characters against a familiar backdrop. ;o)

Will you be writing more romance in the future? 

I definitely will. I’m already thinking about the sequel to The Seadog. But first I have to go back to my other series and catch them up. Right now I’m writing book 11 in the Gus LeGarde Mysteries, called Voodoo Summer. It features young Gus (age 13 in 1966) and in addition to a fun, family mystery, it shares many of the issues of the decade, including prejudice and mistreatment of black folks. It also shows great heroism, and some of the defining moments that made the adult Gus who he is. Next on the agenda is Devil’s Spring, book 3 in my Bittersweet Hollow romantic suspense series. That one is loosely planned, but needs to be written first to flesh it out.

Can you give us a peek?

I’m going to share a few chapters here from my recently released book, The Seadog, below. Thank you for having me over today, Dora! It’s been a blast. ;o)

Great! What a treat. Thank you, Aaron.

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Chapter 1


Scout slumped in her old Honda Civic, staring at the grand mansion at the end of the white oyster shell driveway. Biting her lip, she peered toward the front window where a shadowy figure passed back and forth behind the sheer curtains. 

Was someone watching her? Would they call the cops on her?

She knew her fifteen-year-old rust bucket didn’t look like it belonged to this place. The house probably expected Mercedes and Jaguars, not the beater she’d bought off her ex-boyfriend for three hundred bucks.

Heart thumping wildly, she rolled down her window to catch the breeze coming off the sea. Instantly, fresh air filled the car with a salty tang. 

Did she have the courage to go right up to the front door and knock on it? Could she? And what would she say? “Hi, there. I’m the daughter you never knew you had.”

She adjusted the sling on her arm, wincing. It still throbbed. Mind racing now, she considered her options.

Go back, and face Monty’s anger? No, his wrath?

Or…she could walk boldly up to The Seacrest mansion and demand that her father recognize her, insist that he help her.

She’d never met the guy, but she’d hated him her whole life. For the past twenty-three years, she’d pictured a leonine bastard, with a stone cold heart and miserly soul. Her mother had painted a pretty dreadful picture of Rudy Vanderhorn. And yet, here she was, about to face him down.

Shaking her mane of fiery hair, she let out a shivery sigh. “I can’t go back. I can’t.” She eased the car forward and made her way along the driveway, coming closer to the home where she’d been conceived. Her mother—her dear, sweet mother—had run from this place years ago. Pregnant. Betrayed. And oh-so-scared.

And that bastard Rudy Vanderhorn hadn’t even come after her. He just let her go. Never chased her. Never tried to find her. What was wrong with such a man?

Well, she’d soon find out.

Now anger replaced fear, and she felt courage swelling in her heart. “I have to do this. For Mum.”
She pulled up in the parking area and turned off the engine. The beast choked, shuddered, and finally sputtered to a stop.

With her purse on her shoulder, she slid out into the heat of the day. Her white sundress was already wrinkled. She smoothed its skirt and headed for the entrance, but before she could press her finger on the ringer, the massive door swung open. 

A heavy-set woman wearing a white apron glanced quizzically at her. “Ja? Can I help you?”
Scout thought she sounded Swedish. Or maybe German? “Is Mr. Vanderhorn home?” Scout asked, nervously twisting her leather purse strap. “I need to see him.”

The housemaid—if that’s what she was—turned as white as her apron. “Nein.”

“I’m sorry. Do I have the right house? This is The Seacrest, isn’t it?”

The woman drew in a quivery sigh, then seemed to collect herself. “Ja. I’m sorry. But the Mister…he…”

“He what?” Scout asked, feeling queasy now.

“He is gone. It was a heart attack. In the hurricane, last summer.” The woman’s voice wobbled and she seemed ready to burst into tears.

“Fritzi?” A voice called from inside. “Who is it?”

The distraught woman turned to answer. “It’s a lady, Miss. She wants to see the Mister.”

“Hi. I’m Libby.” A dark-haired woman ambled forward with a baby on her hip. She shook hands with Scout. “You were asking about my father?” Suspicion grew in her eyes.

But Scout could only stare at the baby girl. About five months old, the baby grinned at her with moss green eyes, peering under an unruly mop of flaming red hair. 

It was like looking at one of her own baby pictures. 

“I—” Scout’s legs turn to rubber. “I mean—”

Now it was Libby’s turn to gawk. “Wait a minute. Do I know you?”

Scout laughed, but she knew at any second it could swing into tears. Her father was dead. She was too late. “I doubt it,” she said, sagging against the door. “I’m sorry. I should go.”

Libby put a hand on her arm. “No. Wait. Come inside. Let’s sort this out.”

If she hadn’t been so hot, so tired, and if her arm hadn’t throbbed so badly, Scout would have run away. Anywhere but here, where she had to face such disappointment. 

“Come inside,” Libby urged. “Fritzi will get you a cold drink. Is lemonade okay?”

Scout mumbled her assent and followed Libby into a room carpeted with a thick Oriental rug, and strewn with polished mahogany antiques. A vacuum stood on the floor by a grand piano. 

That’s what I saw from the road. Fritzi, if I heard the name right, was pushing that vacuum back and forth in this room.
 
Fritzi made apologies and whisked the machine away, rolling it toward the hall. “I will be right back with refreshments,” she said. 

Definitely a German accent, Scout thought. 

“Please. Sit,” Libby said, openly staring again. 

“I’m sorry to barge in on you like this. I’m sure you’re busy with—”

Libby sank beside Scout on the couch and settled the little girl on the floor. “This is Sidney. She’s my youngest.”

“You have more?”

“Oh, yes. We have triplets, too. They’re four years old. Girls. Ramona, Sylvia, and Olivia.”

“Pretty names.” Scout gave a trembling smile. “But four girls. Oh my.”

Libby laughed. “It’s a bit of a challenge.”

Scout nodded. “I’ll bet.” She folder her hands on her lap and lowered her eyes. This is too weird. I have to get out of here.

Libby waited a beat, then burst out with her question. “I’m sorry. But you must have noticed. You have the same eye and hair color as my little one, here.”

Scout squirmed in her seat. “Yes.”

Libby glanced back and forth between them again. “Your hair is a unique coppery shade. I’ve not seen it very often.”

“Um, there’s a reason for that. I think.”

Libby looked up. “There is?”

“Um. My name’s Scout, and I’m…I’m actually related to you. We have…we had…the same father. Rudy Vanderhorn was my father. My mother said he had my exact hair color when he was a boy.”

***
Libby stared at the redheaded woman who sat beside her with tears welling in her eyes. She glanced between Sidney and Scout. She was right about the hair color. “Wait a minute. I don’t understand. How—”

The girl leaned forward, covering her face with her hands. Her shoulders shook. “I’m too late.”

“Wait,” Libby repeated. “Rudy was your father? How’s that possible? When were you born?”

The girl hiccupped a few times, then sat up, wiping furiously at her wet cheeks. “I’ll be thirty-three in a few weeks.”

The blood drained from Libby’s face. “That’s not possible. I’ll be thirty-three in August. How—”

Scout stuttered the words. “My mother was Iris. She was married to Rudy.” 

Libby stiffened. “But Iris was my mother. She left us when I was three, and we never saw her again. There’s no way she could be your mother.”

Scout glanced up at Libby. “My mother, Iris, left when your father had an affair with someone else. She was pregnant with me when she ran. Iris isn’t your mother. It’s not possible. Not if we’re both turning thirty-three. And we’re sure as hell not twins.”

Libby felt the blood drain from her face. She was about to ask Scout what in the world she was talking about, but Fritzi entered, bearing a tray of clinking glasses. 

Fritzi laid the tray on the glass-covered coffee table. “Here you go, ladies. You can add your own sugar, if you want to. There is a bottle for Sidney, too.” 

Fritzi’s hands trembled, and Libby wondered if she was still upset about having been asked about Rudy. She’d been with the family for as long as Libby could remember, and had taken his death very hard.

When Fritzi left the room, Libby picked up her daughter and took a deep breath. How could this woman accuse her father of such a terrible thing? “I don’t understand what you’re saying. It’s not possible. Like I said, my mother—Iris—didn’t leave until I was three years old.” She stopped and thought about it. “I mean, that’s what my father always said. I don’t actually remember her.”
Scout didn’t answer.

“You’d better tell me what you know,” Libby said. “Just start from the beginning.”

***



Aaron Paul Lazar is obsessed with writing. He's completed twenty-five books to date, and has earned nineteen literary book awards. He writes mysteries, suspense, love stories, and more. You'll usually find him writing his heart out in the early hours of the day - preferably in the dark, quiet hours when no one else is awake in his bustling household.    

“Addictive, award-winning fiction.” 




BOOKS:

3. MAZURKA
11. VOODOO SUMMER (coming 2016)

1. THE DISAPPEARANCE OF BILLY MOORE (formerly Healey’s Cave)



3. DEVIL’S SPRING (coming in 2016)

WRITING ADVICE
WRITE LIKE THE WIND, volumes 1, 2, 3

WEBSITES:

aaron.lazar@blogspot.com

Thursday, March 3, 2016

Sculpting out a story

I recently heard a popular author say something about how a writer works at their story, chipping away at it until the essence of the story begins to appear. It sounded so much to me like sculpting that I had to go to the Internet to check and see if I was right.

Sculpture Techniques. A sculptor can achieve his desired results by either subtractive techniques (i.e. chipping or carving material away, as with stone or wood) or additive techniques (i.e. adding material, as with clay or wax). -- Saatchi Art

Yes, indeed. Writing is very much like sculpting.

It was such a good comparison, I decided to blog about it. In fact, as I dug in to research the term SCULPTURE I found that the very art form has undergone a lot of changes in the last century. New tools, new techniques - all the facets of sculpture and sculpting has become a much broader subject.

Just like WRITING and books.

Has anything in the world of art, either visual or otherwise, had more changes than writing? We went from pen/pencil and paper to digital. That alone is a mighty switch. Years gone by, subject matter of books has been opened as well. No longer is the subject of intimate relationship sent to someone's home in a brown paper wrapping. (See the Fifty Shades series of books standing face-out on shelves).

And sculptures can be designed in many mediums. There are stone, wood, and metals just for starters.

Books too, have their formats. We no longer are held at paper. Now there are digital files, and audiobooks, and even now, some writers are playing with video as a format to provide story to consumers.

Even when I sit down to work on my latest story, watching the elements unfold as I develop the characters, setting, and use dialogue to my advantage, I can see how it is like a magnificient altarpiece dug out of lindenwood. I hope you too will see my art in what I do.

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