tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6001825743960552008.post7265588877154332039..comments2024-03-27T18:06:04.484-04:00Comments on Murder by 4: My Don't ListMarta Stephenshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14126647102399666578noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6001825743960552008.post-30305614567521790112008-08-21T12:16:00.000-04:002008-08-21T12:16:00.000-04:00Excellent list, Kim. And TS - don't be embarrassed...Excellent list, Kim. And TS - don't be embarrassed. We ALL started somewhere, and I, too, remember the day (oh so long ago...) when SW Vaughn clued me in on the "that" conundrum!!! But don't forget, you can keep it in your dialogue, as "that" sounds natural. LOL.Aaron Paul Lazarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06117814221437165664noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6001825743960552008.post-71274439583147413612008-08-21T11:52:00.001-04:002008-08-21T11:52:00.001-04:00Great tips! I'm embarrassed on how many "thats" I ...Great tips! I'm embarrassed on how many "thats" I just deleted! That took a long time and I hope I won't have to go through that again :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6001825743960552008.post-17911709650131906152008-08-21T11:52:00.000-04:002008-08-21T11:52:00.000-04:00Great tips! I'm embarrassed on how many "thats" I ...Great tips! I'm embarrassed on how many "thats" I just deleted! That took a long time and I hope I won't have to go through that again :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6001825743960552008.post-31117140922461430102008-08-21T10:46:00.000-04:002008-08-21T10:46:00.000-04:00And all I kept thinking of as i read this is: "Gad...And all I kept thinking of as i read this is: "Gads! Is she talking about me?" :()<BR/><BR/>Excellent points!! Nothing worse than reading a long list of character discriptions. Another is excessive tags. I recently read a book in which the author wrote something like this:<BR/><BR/>She jumped at the sound of the doorbell then ran to open the door. "John, didn't expect you back so soon," she said. <BR/><BR/>We already know who's talking. No need for the tag.Marta Stephenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14126647102399666578noreply@blogger.com